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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage.

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Some people think that it is good for students to start learning a foreign
language
 at primary grades rather than secondary grades at school.
However
, others tend to believe in a different way. In my opinion, I believe the benefit of teaching a foreign tongue to the primary level children are far better than its drawback as
this
 will
promote in development
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promote development
 of
brain
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the brain
 and an incredible help in their later stage of life. Development of the
brain
 is one of the primary reasons for introducing a foreign
language
 at
lower school
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the lower school
a lower school
. According to a study conducted by the UN, children who are multilingual are more intelligent than those who are monolingual. As
being
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has been
 able to speak other languages rather than the mother tongue will not only encourage in
brain
 development but
also
 activate some parts of the
brain
 which are inactive in monolingual students.
Hence
, learning another
language
 at primary school will enhance in developing the mental status of pupils. Comfortable and confident is another point to be considered which will enable learners in the later phase of lives. Students who are able to speak
other national
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the other national language
language
 will be more comfortable and confident to face other people especially foreigners.
This
 will encourage the students at their workplace in their future to work comfortably as a team.
Furthermore
, due to the enhancement of many multinational corporations, companies are looking for employees who are either bilingual or multilingual. So, learning a foreign
language
 from the primary standard will boost the confidence of students and
this
moreover
 helps students to get a job in
future
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the future
. In conclusion, foreign
language
 plays a vital role in
brain
 development and boost the confidence of
children which
Accept comma addition
children, which
 will be a great benefit in their future.
Thus
, the merit outbalance the drawback.

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