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In some countries, children have short school day of 5 hours. In other countries, the school duration is often longer. Does it have more benefits than drawbacks?

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Children in some countries often have a short
school
 duration of 5 hours a day only, while in some other countries kids have to spend a longer duration than that.
This
 essay will argue that having longer
school
 hour than 5 hours have more merits than demerits.
To begin
 with, the striking advantage of having long
school
 hours is that children can be taught for extended hours. Teachers, while getting additional time, is likely to ensure children’s better uptake of lessons in the classroom. That could possibly help young learners achieving superior results than children who spend only 5 hours a day in
school
.
For example
, in the elementary examination of the class 5 students in Canada, most of the high achievers are from those schools that have a 7 hour
school
 day.
However
, a possible disadvantage of having extended
school
 hours is that children might have limited ties with their families. Spending more hours at
school
 is likely to spare only a few hours for the kids at home. Children might find those few hours inadequate to develop a quality relationship with family members, thereby it may have an impact on family relationships. In fact, a local university journal
last
 year claimed that family bond is likely to become stronger with children passing long hours with their parents in their offspring. In conclusion,
although
 keeping long
school
 hours, leaving fewer hours for the kids to spare with their family, it could
also
 result in a reduced study hour at home. Since children can have their lessons studied at
school
, they could spend the remaining time entirely with their family members without having a worry of their study,
therefore
 the advantages completely outweigh the disadvantages.
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