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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out f doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Few range of America districts decided to bend that people who are under 18 years old are not able to outdoor activities after 10pm. They have to be with parents or other guardian if it is necessary. I believe
that is
 a great idea to preserve children from the dangerous situation.
This
 circumstance has been a kind of trends in the world recently. Some Asian countries like Japan and Korea made a law about entertainers who are still students. They should avoid to broadcast at late night. It is the same reason with curfew, which is for their safety for younger age. The major reason why I agree with
this
 rule is significant crimes often occurred at night time. Especially serious problems present at urban street with drunken, homeless and people who drug. Sometimes even adults feel scared during walking in the central of cities in the midnight.
Therefore
, I strongly insist that parents should be together with their children outside in the late time. While, I believe that the limitation reflects how the city is safe for children.
For example
,
although
 New York is always crowed by
diversity
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diverse
 people, but it is quite safety. Because police
officer
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officers
keep
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keeps
 walking and driving around to check if there are
strengers
anyone who does not belong in the environment in which they are found
strangers
.
Few months
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A few months
 ago, a little girl who is just 12 years ago went out to meet a
boyfriends
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boyfriend
 at 9pm. She met someone on the way and she disappeared in a sudden. Her parents checked all CCTY of
street
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the street
 where she has passed.
but
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But
 unfortunately they
are no longer meet
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no longer meet
are no longer meeting
have no longer met
 her again. It looks like a horrible drama story, but it
happend
come to pass
happened
 in
real situation
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real situations
.
Although
 unbelievable accident could be
accured
come to pass
occurred
acquired
accrued
 anytime, high percentages of crimes which involved children are
cuased
put or send forth
cast
cased
 in the dark. In conclusion, young ages are the one of weakness in the society who need protection and care by adults. I ensure that old generation should have responsibilities for
next generation
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the next generation
 to grow up without danger and
unsafty
. For
this
, we need
more specific law
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a more specific law
more specific laws
 to support people under 18 years old who
are trapped
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is trapped
 easily by
dangerous situataion
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a dangerous situation
dangerous situation
dangerous situations
dangerous station
.
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