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*we live in a world of technology theses days. Whole internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages.*

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In recent times, the awareness of technological advancements has increased tremendously.
Although
,
this
 has been found to be advantageous, but some individuals think the issues of data checks and safety supersedes the advantages and I totally agree with
this
 assertion. To start with, not being able to regulate the data on the net, could result in character deformation. To clarify, since almost everyone has access various websites,
that is
, both young and old, they browse different sites, of which the incidents of visiting pornographic sites are alarming.
As a result
, it has been found to be responsible for the high case of rape and illicit sexual acts which has engrossed the youths and elderly alike.
For instance
, the National Agency on Rape and other Sexually Related issues published that eighty percent of their suspects are cyber mongers.
Therefore
, uncontrolled information is indeed detrimental to the society. Another point to consider is the fact that cyber insecurity could lead to financial robbery.
In other words
, when people's facts are not secured, these fraudsters intrude into their accounts to get their details,
then
 proceed to defraud them of their hard earned money. Other times, they pretend to be harmless friends on social media just to access information and perpetuate the evil deeds.
For example
, the Ministry of Finance in Nigeria announced that ninety percent of financial thefts are done online.
Therefore
, confirming the fact that net insecurity is a huge threat to the finances of citizens. Conclusively, despite the merits of surfing the internet, in my view, I totally agree that the demerits of deformity of behaviour and financial wrecks, undoubtedly override the merits thereof.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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