Despite greater access to school education, many adults today still cannot read or write. How does this affect them in life? What can government do to help them?

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Illiteracy is one of the biggest problems, faced by

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society.

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of having an increasing number of primary and secondary schools, many men and women continue to remain illiterate. The primary effect of

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is they are helpless to live in poor conditions

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lack

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of proper

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issue

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resolved by timely intervention by the

government

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which can provide free basic

education

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to everyone. It is a known fact that to get a

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white collar job, an individual should be highly qualified which is not the case in many adults.

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lack

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education

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and proper

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they are hired to work as

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mainly at a construction site and are paid extremely minimal wages.

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they continue to remain below

poverty

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the poverty

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line and are unable to carve out a better life for themselves or their family.

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, India, being one of the fastest growing economies in the world has one of the highest numbers of illiterate young population.

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, the

government

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can help them by providing free basic

education

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. The

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of any country, being the highest

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authority, can help by making basic

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compulsory for all.

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, with

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the problem will be addressed at

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level wherein everyone will at least know

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of reading and writing which can help them in future.

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could be done by setting up new schools in every village and

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of the country.

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, the

government

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can collaborate with NGOs wherein these NGOs can conduct classes for

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men and women and educate them about basic reading and writing which will eventually help them to progress in life.

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, there was a recent news article on an NGO – Hope which conducts night

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for labourers and provides them

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basis

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education

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and

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in turn is helping the workers immensely. In conclusion,

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in spite

of improving primary

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resources the number of uneducated youth continues to remain high and

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this

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they continue to live in poverty. The onus is on the

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to provide proper access

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education

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to everyone thereby improving the living standards.

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task achievement

While the essay adequately addresses the topic, try to provide more specific solutions and actions the government can take. Delve deeper into how these solutions help decrease illiteracy rates and improve living conditions.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next. Some transitions can be more explicit to guide the reader through your argument. For example, using transition phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'For this reason' can enhance flow.

coherence cohesion

Work on the logical structure and sentence coherence to deliver points more clearly. For instance, closely relate each sentence within a paragraph to reinforce the main idea. Avoid veering off-topic within paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

Introduction clearly states the problem of illiteracy despite better access to education and sets context for the rest of the essay.

coherence cohesion

The conclusion nicely summarizes the main points and reiterates the responsibility of the government, effectively wrapping up the essay.

task achievement

Good use of specific examples such as referencing India and the NGO 'Hope' to illustrate the effects of illiteracy and possible solutions.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

368 words

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