The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show what Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare
three
activities that Australian
students
pursued right after they left their secondary schools in the
three
years 1980, 1990 and 2000.
It is clear that
pursuing
further
education and working were the two main choices for Australian
students
while
unemployment played a minor part in all the
three
mentioned years mentioned. Working after finishing school was the only option for them that increased in popularity during the period. Among the
three
destinations, the number of unemployed
students
was the least at only 10% of the total graduates in 1980.
Although
this
saw an increase to 12% in 1990, it fell back to 8% in 2000. Meanwhile, continuing higher education and taking a job took turns in order of being the most popular option for school leavers. In detail, half of all
students
leaving secondary school decided higher academic pursuit to be their first preference in 1980 but
this
choice became less attractive in the following years with 38% and 37% continuing their
further
studies in 1990 and 2000, respectively.
By contrast
, only 40% of
students
graduating from secondary schools took a job right away in 1980 but
this
proportion increased to 50% in 1990 and reached a peak of 55% in the final year.
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