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You share a parking area with several neighbours and have recently started having problems. Write a letter to be copied to all neighbours that share the parking area. In that letter • explaining the problems • suggesting ways to help the situation • proposing a possible meeting You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Neighbour

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Dear Neighbour, It is knowledge to everyone that the place where we park our cars is becoming crowded.
Firstly
 we have suffered from problems related to cars parked in front of our own garages, not only it but
also
 some residences have more vehicles than are permitted in the contract of rent.
Due to
 an increase dramatically in the number of people who are new residents, It's truly important that new solutions are suggested. I would like to do one brainstorm with all together during our next monthly meeting. We live in a remarkable place, and undoubtedly is very important to think in the same way.
Although
 some people who don't have a car believe that it is not their problem, I
Believe
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 that is a collective issue and residences that have more cars than slots in the garage need to solve
this
 question, even
then
 it
against
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 the original rules. For my contribution, one solution is to find a new area and residents who are interested in using
this
 new parking can contribute to
this
 new infrastructure with an additional or extra fee. I hope to meet all residents at the next meeting on the
last
 Monday of
this
 month. Best Regards. Luciano Camilot
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coherence cohesion
Try to make your sentences more concise to improve clarity. For example, instead of saying, 'Due to an increase dramatically in the number of people who are new residents,' you could say, 'Due to the dramatic increase in new residents.'
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter for grammatical errors. For instance, 'situations' should be 'solutions,' and 'is knowledge to everyone' should be 'It is known to everyone.'
task achievement
Clear explanation of the problems related to parking issues.
coherence cohesion
Good suggestion of having a brainstorming session during the monthly meeting.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured with logical flow from problem identification to proposing solutions.
task achievement
Appropriate tone for the audience and context.
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