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Managing global environmental issues should be handled by one organization on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Environment
Suggestion
Environmental
 problems are multi-faced. Placing the management of these issues on one particular company will be a burden on it in many respects.
This
 essay will prove why
this
 problem should be handled by multiple organizations for a better result. Handling multiple pollution issues concerning air, water and earth is a burden in many respects on an organization.
Firstly
, the vastness of the geographical area itself will make it impossible to be managed single handed.
Secondly
, like the world is multi-cultured the problem faced by each country are different from others.
For instance
, as per the report published by an NGO, the
third
 world countries face problems which are totally different from that of developed countries. So, managing environmental problems based on
physical territory
Suggestion
the physical territory
 of a nation will be a better idea to avoid clashes including emotional.
On the other hand
, if these problems are handled by organizations on country wise, locally sensitive issues can be taken care more effectively as they are aware of the way of life in a better way. To be more specific, in a country like India, local tribes living near forest depend on
forest
Suggestion
forests
the forest
 for
firewood which
Accept comma addition
firewood, which
 is a banned practice in many developed countries. Another controversial issue is the argument over
hole
Suggestion
the hole
a hole
 in the ozone layer, where the concern is for top industrialized nations. So these two contradictions really prove that localized management will be a better idea. To summarize, I agree with the fact that the environmental issue is a global problem and should be dealt in a global scale. But one organization handling it will be less effective and can get in
to
being one more than one
two
 controversies when dealing with sensitive local issues. So, global effort with local participation will be the best solution.
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