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The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise To what extent do you agree?

#health #exercise
The most effective way to improve and maintain standard
health
 is by doing exercise regularly on a daily base.In my opinion
,
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,
I agree
it but
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it, but
however
 a proper food or dietary restrictions should be followed
parallely
being everywhere equidistant and not intersecting
parallel
then
 only we can improve our fitness. Now a days people are so busy in doing their work because of which they are neglecting their
health
.Generally
Health
 issues occur to people falling above 30 years
,
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,
In order to earn
money
 people are living a hard time.Because of work timings people are neglecting to do regular exercises
,
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,
due to which their
health
 might affect.So if people can do exercise on a regular basis their
health
 might get developed. Even though people do exercise on a daily basis
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Even though sometimes it might not enough because they should follow proper dietary restrictions and should eat healthy food.Working class people are doing exercises regularly
,
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,
but
on the other
hand they
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hand, they
 are not following proper dietary menu in their daily life.Because of which they are facing the problems like obesity
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,
gas trouble
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
. People now-a-days visiting hospitals for their illness
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Because of which they are wasting lots of
money
.Investing their
money
 in medical insurances are becoming trendy.
Instead
 of doing
it they
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it, they
 should invest their
money
 to buy gym equipments or by taking gym membership.One can do it by free by going to parks and doing jogging and yoga. To recapitulate the essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would say "Prevention is better than cure".People should take certain measures like doing exercises on a regular basis and following proper dietary restrictions to maintain proper
health
.
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