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In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Freedom plays a pivotal role in everybody’s life. We can see in today’s modernized era that nobody likes to be restricted, whether it is a child or an adult. Some people think that there should have some strict rules of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
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in
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 children, but I disagree with
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 statement. Wherever it is a reality that sometimes more restrictions can cause more frustration in children, which leads to many other mental problems as well.
Morever they
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Moreover, they
Moreover they
 can be, behave like a stubborn. Sometimes they feel themselves under pressure, which can be the main reason for their poor performance in their field. In some
cases children
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cases, children
 may insist on doing these things from where we?
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 try to keep them away.
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words, we
 have to look for other aspects as well, like if we usually ignore our children’s bad habits,
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 they can't be good human beings in their future life.
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Moreover if
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 we never draw attention upon the children’s main
activities
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activities, then
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 they might end up in a bad company. They can know regarding the value of respect for their elders. They can know the importance of relationships. They can know regarding their cultural values as well. In a nutshell, I would like to say that children
should be teach
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should be taught
should teach
 the value of their customs, rituals and respect towards their elders for their future life, but most of the additional restriction should be being avoided. It would be better to make them
good
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better
 human beings in their future.
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