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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been an increased population of youth in some nations over the total
number
 of older people. It is noteworthy that the economy of any country does much better with an appreciable
number
 of teeming youth.
This
esssay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
assay
 will shed light on the merits of increased
number
 of young adults compared to the
number
 of ageing group. Youth are in the age group between 18 years and 45 years and they have the vigour to do well on
job
Suggestion
the job
 and deliver thereby increasing the turnover/
revenue
 of the organization that hired them. Young people are result oriented, more agile and could withstand more
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
 than the older counterparts.
For instance
, in Canada, the North American
nation
 has embarked on skilled worker
immigration which
Accept comma addition
immigration, which
 has turned out
to improve
Suggestion
to improving
 Canadian government's economy and as well reduced unemployment. Improved national
revenue
thus
 it is generally known that the working class of any
nation
contribute
Suggestion
contributes
 immensely to the
revenue
 generated by state and federal authorities in terms of tax, tolls and other bills.
The more young
Suggestion
Most young
 adults in any
nation
's working class, the more
revenue
such
nation
 would generate.
For example
, it is estimated that
revenue
 more than N100 billion
naira
Suggestion
Naira
more
 was generated from tax in half year 2019 in Nigeria. In a nutshell, the points
dicussed
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discussed
 above show that the advantages of
large
Suggestion
the large number
a large number
number
 of youth
surpasses
Suggestion
surpass
 older people.
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