At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been an increased population of youth in some nations over the total

number

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of older people. It is noteworthy that the economy of any country does much better with an appreciable

number

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of teeming youth.

This

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esssay

an analytic or interpretive literary composition

essay

assay

will shed light on the merits of increased

number

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of young adults compared to the

number

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of ageing group. Youth are in the age group between 18 years and 45 years and they have the vigour to do well on

job

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the job

and deliver thereby increasing the turnover/

revenue

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of the organization that hired them. Young people are result oriented, more agile and could withstand more

presure

the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)

pressure

than the older counterparts.

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, in Canada, the North American

nation

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has embarked on skilled worker

immigration which

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immigration, which

has turned out

to improve

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to improving

Canadian government's economy and as well reduced unemployment. Improved national

revenue

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thus

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it is generally known that the working class of any

nation

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contribute

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contributes

immensely to the

revenue

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generated by state and federal authorities in terms of tax, tolls and other bills.

The more young

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Most young

adults in any

nation

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's working class, the more

revenue

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such

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nation

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would generate.

For example

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, it is estimated that

revenue

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more than N100 billion

naira

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Naira

was generated from tax in half year 2019 in Nigeria. In a nutshell, the points

dicussed

to consider or examine in speech or writing

discussed

above show that the advantages of

large

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the large number

a large number

number

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of youth

surpasses

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surpass

older people.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

227 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

demographic composition
economic dynamism
dependency ratio
social services
pension systems
technological adeptness
innovative workforce
national savings
educational demand
employment opportunities
crime rates
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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays, it is getting difficult for people to enjoy their lives in cities. Why do you think this is? What can the government do to make life in cities more enjoyable?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vechiles outweigh the disadvantages?

YOUR ENGLISH TEACHER HAS FOUND A NEW PENFRIEND FOR YOU. WRITE A LETTER TO THE PENFRIEND AND INTRODUCE YOURSELF. TELL THEM WHAT YOU LIKE DOING IN YOUR FREE TIME ASK TO TELL YOU ABOUT THEIR HOBBIES AND INTERESTS