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Happiness is considered very important in life. 1. Why is it difficult to define? 2. What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Humans most of the time consider happiness as primordial. I will explain why it is so hard to describe and what the different things
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, it is hard to define because it is difficult to know what we really feel.
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, to be happy , you have to have mental stability and
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 have to value little things , and
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, you have to be grateful.
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 feeling of joy is hard to define because not everyone feels the same when they are happy. As I mentioned, it is a feeling , so it is abstract , and by definition, something abstract is hard to describe.
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, love is another complex emotion , and we do not really know how to determine it and even less when we are adolescents.
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, many factors can help you be more content. I think the most important one is to value little things that make you feel good. Another key point is to always be grateful because if you are grateful, it means you know that you realise you are lucky or not , but you appreciate every moment. And
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, finding mental stability is crucial if you want to be more delightful.
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 why some people who are struggling more or do not have a lot are sometimes happier than ones who seem to have everything.
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, happiness is a difficult concept to define
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 like feelings in general ;
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, many factors can help you be more content , but in the end, it is all a question of mentality and if you want to be happy.

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structure
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content
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language
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grammar
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coherence
Use linking words like first, also, and finally to make the flow of ideas easy to follow.
content
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structure
The essay uses clear order words such as First, Second, Finally to show order.
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There are ideas about real life use and some examples.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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