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write a letter to a organizer of annual festival which is going to organize in your place. Give feedback for last year, mention what you can do and ask some question about festival

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Dear Mr .Wilson I am writing
this
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 considered letter to appreciate your all your effort for the arrangement of
festival
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the festival
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 of
last
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 year and make a contract for a new annual festival. Starting with the previous festival, you arranged
last
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 year, I was satisfied and impressed by the services and arrangements. As
a
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I remember the festival has taken place
in
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 Halloween,
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 it was a dark and Halloween themed festival.
Moreoverl
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Moreover
, people did not have to purchase costumes because you already provided
high quality
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 costumes with
50
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a 50
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% discount. When it comes to
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 year’s festival, there are some factors that I would like to point out.
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,
in contrast
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 to
previous
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 festival,
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 one is supposed to be
celebration
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a celebration
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 of
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 Nevruz which is
traditional
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a traditional
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 holiday and
celebration
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a celebration
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 of
spring
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the spring
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 season in Azerbaijan. For
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 reason, it would be fascinating if you could put artificial fire which would allow people to stay in
holiday
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the holiday
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 mood.
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, you could include small cafes that sell baklava which is the main symbol of Nevruz. As a final point, there are a few tasks that I have already finished. To start, I have already made an agreement with an advertisement company, and they will create
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high quality and attractive ads to notify people about the special event.
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,
recently
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 launched small company will sponsor us to afford all the expenses. I am looking forward to your reply and wish your cooperation. Sincere thanks.
Alimardan
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Ali Mardan
 Ahmadov.,
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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