We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It was a lengthy dispute about whether we can not give assistance to those people all over the world and only help people in our own countries and communities. I'm afraid I have to disagree with
this
point because we could help more if we have free
time
and money. The argument of approving that people should help their national or local people is that
help giver
Suggestion
the help giver
usually fell a concrete purpose.
For example
, we are more likely to notice the homeless who might need a warm coat to suffer a long winter.
Helpgivers
usually devote their
time
or support money to the homeless. In my community, there are lots of "used cloth" boxes which gather
second
-hand clothes, pillows, and so on. At the same
time
, some students in the rural area often lacking educational recourse indeed should be supported. As an educated undergraduate student, I think I have the responsibilities to help them,
for instance
, supporting their academic knowledge, introducing the real world outside, etc. Notwithstanding, there are many outside regions beyond our countries which might be not likely to eat sufficiently, drink purely. They, especially in the
Third
World, loss many staple sources which we used to waste. If we have enough
time
and energy, we could afford
attent
Suggestion
to attend
attend
ardent
some international volunteer associations, which dedicate themselves
to deliver
Suggestion
to delivering
love to other countries.
For example
, we even could construct a filter with stones and sands in
distinguished
Suggestion
distinguishing
size to filter river water using our knowledge. In conclusion, we could have a try to make more people influenced by our help. A river made of thousands of dripping water. More support, more love.
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