You recently moved to a new house and you want to invite an old friend to stay with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Invite him to stay and suggest a date. -Describe the new house and garden. -Say why you like your house.
Dear Thomas,
I hope
this
email finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing this
email to invite to
my new Correct pronoun usage
you to
house
where I moved with my full family members last
month.
As we have not been meeting for a long day, I would like to invite you to this
new house
including your family members dated on the 7th of March. Besides
, I have been planning to arrange a small celebration party with my friends and relatives on the same date. I hope this
date will be suitable for you as your office is closed on that day.
Furthermore
, I bought this
quaint house
from a real estate company named "Rankon Properties" which is 4500 square feet has
four bedrooms with an attached bathroom, living Correct word choice
and has
room
, drawing room
and kitchen room
. On top of that, there is a large garden in the backyard lawn where various types of flower
have been planted.
Fix the agreement mistake
flowers
Moreover
, I am really over the moon as this
house
is very much spacious especially
the master bedroom. Add the comma(s)
, especially
In addition
to that, the surrounding environment is soothing and sunlight can easily reflect in the living room
and drawing room
which plays a significant role in saving the overall
utility costs.
I hope you will accept this
invitation and will make the evening enjoyable and memorable.
Yours lovingly,
RobertSubmitted by faisalmahamood on
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Task Achievement
Your letter achieves its purpose quite well but could be improved by ensuring that you address all parts of the task with equal clarity and detail. For instance, while you invite your friend and suggest a date, and describe your new house admirably, a little more about why you enjoy your house beyond the space and light could add depth to your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter's structure is clear, and you make good use of paragraphs, each dedicated to a different aspect. However, smoothly transitioning between paragraphs, perhaps by using linking words or phrases ('Furthermore', 'Moreover'), could enhance the flow of your writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the overall greeting and closing are well-done, remember to maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout. Though the tone is generally suitable, some phrases may come across as too formal or technical (e.g., 'radiant health', '4500 square feet'). A slightly more casual tone may better suit the context of writing to an old friend.