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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Life is becoming more stressful in the 21st century. In our society, teenagers are especially stressed out due to multiple reasons. The most common reasons are, higher expectations and demands from the parents and institutes. Since the parents are more demanding now a days, teenagers are under tremendous pressure to perform in every aspect of life. They are expected to excel in education, sports and other activities. Regardless of
student’s capabilities
Suggestion
a student’s capabilities
the student’s capabilities
, they are
demanded
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demanding
 to have their marks above 90%, in order to join a reasonable program
.
Accept space
.
For example
, Universities demand excellent performance at
high school level
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the high school level
.
Therefore
, our youngsters are stressed out to meet the expectations of parents and the modern world. In today’s competitive world, people compete in, education, jobs, sports, and in many other aspects of life. Especially, teenagers face these issues in class, in
family
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the family
families
, and among their friends. The class environments
also
 provoke these competitions intentionally or unintentionally.
For example
, students who get good marks are always praised and loved by the teacher.
This
 kind of behaviour, creates an environment of
race
Suggestion
racial
 and pressure for higher marks. There is
also
 a factor of peer-pressure; when it comes to sports and marks. Students take pressure to maintain their place among their friends. In conclusion, the parents must understand the capacity of a teenager before they demand results.
On the other hand
, we must look into the environment of our schools and classes to reduce the causes of stress. Simply, we must not ignore the fact that all humans are different in their intellectual and mental capacities.
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