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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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High earnings of small group in many countries
are appears
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are appearing
appear
 to be beneficial for
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country
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the country's economy
country's economy
economy
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, I strongly disagree with those who make
statement
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statements
the statement
a statement
 by saying salaries should be in certain level.
First
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 of all when it comes to a
county
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county's
economy
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, flow of cash makes
impact
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an impact
. People who obtain high wage are those who dealing with expensive things
such
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 as cars, houses, shopping and much more. For instant, a person who purchases an expensive car producing a chain benefits for those who dealing in business and for government by paying an amount of tax through those
process
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processes
, at
result
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the result
 it grows the
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country
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country's
economy
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 by those who invested in
business
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the business
.
On the other hand
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 people who are in high salaries are those who spend almost half of their life by conducting studies and professional curriculum activities to reach
high level
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a high level
,
for
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example in
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example, in
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
 a person who spend lots of money for studies will support the
country
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 by paying fees, in completion getting high salaries after getting
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 a high position and paying salary tax to
government
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the government
.
Meanwhile those
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Meanwhile, those
 who debating on certain limitations are the one who really had bad impact
in
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on
 them and those are who destroying the
country
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 and its
economy
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. For
instant
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an instant
 I had an experience while I was working in
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
, had college who depends
of
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on
limited salary
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a limited salary
 who focus on sending money
beck
the posterior part of a human (or animal) body from the neck to the end of the spine
back
 home while obtaining
job
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jobs
 and spending his time in overseas, that money is
taking
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taken
 out from
county
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the county
instead
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 of spending locally and helping
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country
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the country economy
economy
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 to grow. In sum, I strongly believe that individuals with high salary in playing a major role in
development
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the development
 of
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country
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the country
.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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