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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided map illustrates the changes made in
road
 access to a
city
 hospital in 2007 and
in
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2010. What stands out from the map is that during
this
 time, the
City
 Hospital has seen many changes in its infrastructure. In 2007, the
City
 Hospital used to have 6
bus
 stops on both
left
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 and right sides of Hospital
Road
while
 in 2010, these
bus
 stops were removed completely.
Instead
, the left side
were
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 extended and a new
bus
 station has been constructed.
Car
 park area
used
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is used
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 to serve
for
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both staff
member
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members
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 and the public.
However
, two
seperate
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separate
car
 parks were established for the use of staff and the public.
Car
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The car
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 park area
located
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is located
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 on the right side of
Hospital
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the Hospital
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road
 just nearby the
busstops
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bus stops
while
 in 2010
this
 area only belonged to
car
 parking for the employees of the hospital without having any
bus
 stops.
Second
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car
 park which served only
for
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the public located on the right
sude
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side
 of
City
 Hospital along the turn to Ring
Road
. Being the
last
 change, two roundabouts were added to both ends of Hospital
Road
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, bus, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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