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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.other however say that this would have little effect on public health and other majores are required.discuss both this view and give yourown opinion.

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Public
health
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 has been always one of the sophisticated issues in each society and over the
last
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 several years, there have been done lots of efforts by governments to improve public
health
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 in some countries.
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, some believe that extending sports facilities in each corner of the country can have a deep effect on
this
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 matter; some other opine that other ways would be more appreciated to have a healthy society. So
this
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 essay has tried to cover both of mentioned views and
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 will suggest one of the best strategies to increase
health
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 indicators. Availability of the sports facilities can make a situation that anyone in any place can do
exercise
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 and undeniably it affects some parameters of public
health
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 in a society. Put another way, these days people can easily find gems near their houses and they don’t need to waste time and cost of going to some specific areas to do
exercise
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.
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, over the
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 years, people should spend time for the mentioned purpose and most of the times they don’t attend to do
exercise
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 as they find it difficult because of the shortage of sports facilities.
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, making sports facilities in each street or residential areas can have a bit effect on public
health
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,
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 cannot encourage people to
exercise
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 lonely.
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, public awareness about the role of exercising in
health
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 would be considered
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 extending gems.
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, Media should concern more about the public
health
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 and broadcast some suitable programs to show the importance of exercising on physical and mind
health
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.
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, there should be held several meetings in schools and universities to invite people to go to gems by describing its benefits. In conclusion, I think if people know that exercising is
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 a long-term investment as they don’t need to pay for serious diseases in older ages, they would be interested in using sports facilities;
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, enough sports facilities should be constructed in each part of cities and villages
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