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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of the newborn. Do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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The
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 leave is a benefit given to protect the dignity of motherhood and to ensure the
health
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 of the
mother
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 and child. I believe that the pros of
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 leave outweigh the cons. A number of arguments support my opinion.
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,
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 leave is very advantageous for the newborns. We all know that the future of the world rests largely in the hands of the generation of generation we are rearing. Once a child is born, it becomes national property. Mothers are the front line childcare providers and
therefore
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, if they are given
maternity
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 leave, they can do their
job
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 better. In most Indian homes the
mother
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's salary is necessary to support the family. So, if the
mother
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 does not get a paid
maternity
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 leave,
then
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 she has to go back to the
job
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 earlier and
this
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 affects the childcare. Nurseries fail to provide the one-to-one interaction children need.
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,
maternity
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 leave is beneficial for the
mother
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 herself. It is an undeniable fact that woman has to go through a very stressful time physically, emotionally and financially, during pregnancy.
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, if women are allowed
maternity
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 leave, they can look after their
health
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. A recent research has proven that if
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 of young mothers is good,
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 the physical and mental
health
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 of children is
also
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 good. Another important advantage of the
maternity
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 leave is that, the
job
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 is secure. Where
maternity
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 leave is not allowed, the woman has to leave her
job
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, and the vacancy may get filled when it is time for her to get back to work. The fear of losing the
job
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 altogether makes many women apprehensive and so they get back to work at the cost of their
health
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 and their child's
health
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. Admittedly, there are a few disadvantages of
maternity
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 leave. A long
maternity
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 leave may be an obstacle for career progression.
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, in the case of unpaid
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 leave, there may be a financial strain on the households. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion saying that the disadvantages of
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 leave are negligible as compared to the advantages.
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 why some countries have taken a step forward and allowed
maternity
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 leave to women after childbirth.
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