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In many countries, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after the birth of the newborn. Do you think the advantages of maternity leave outweigh the disadvantages?

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The
maternity
 leave is a benefit given to protect the dignity of motherhood and to ensure the
health
 of the
mother
 and child. I believe that the pros of
maternity
 leave outweigh the cons. A number of arguments support my opinion.
First
,
maternity
 leave is very advantageous for the newborns. We all know that the future of the world rests largely in the hands of the generation of generation we are rearing. Once a child is born, it becomes national property. Mothers are the front line childcare providers and
therefore
, if they are given
maternity
 leave, they can do their
job
 better. In most Indian homes the
mother
's salary is necessary to support the family. So, if the
mother
 does not get a paid
maternity
 leave,
then
 she has to go back to the
job
 earlier and
this
 affects the childcare. Nurseries fail to provide the one-to-one interaction children need.
Secondly
,
maternity
 leave is beneficial for the
mother
 herself. It is an undeniable fact that woman has to go through a very stressful time physically, emotionally and financially, during pregnancy.
Therefore
, if women are allowed
maternity
 leave, they can look after their
health
. A recent research has proven that if
health
 of young mothers is good,
then
 the physical and mental
health
 of children is
also
 good. Another important advantage of the
maternity
 leave is that, the
job
 is secure. Where
maternity
 leave is not allowed, the woman has to leave her
job
, and the vacancy may get filled when it is time for her to get back to work. The fear of losing the
job
 altogether makes many women apprehensive and so they get back to work at the cost of their
health
 and their child's
health
. Admittedly, there are a few disadvantages of
maternity
 leave. A long
maternity
 leave may be an obstacle for career progression.
Secondly
, in the case of unpaid
maternity
 leave, there may be a financial strain on the households. To sum up, I reiterate my opinion saying that the disadvantages of
maternity
 leave are negligible as compared to the advantages.
That is
 why some countries have taken a step forward and allowed
maternity
 leave to women after childbirth.
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