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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world
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along with food,
c
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,
loth and shelter,
health
 services
also
 consider in
government
’s duties.Many
health
 issues are a
rising
advancing or becoming higher or greater in degree or value or status
rising
and cost to cope up with these diseases are extremely high
,
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,
thus
 it b
ecome
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becomes
difficult for g
eneral public
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the general public
to avail appropriate medical treatments.I personally agree with
this
 notion. There are myriad of arguments to support my point.The
first
 and foremost reason is the unequal distribution of income. As poor becoming poor and rich become richer
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,
there is n
eed
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a need
for
government
 to provide amenities to m
asses
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the masses
under p
overty
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the poverty
for their livelihood.
For example
, a
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an
Indian cricket player, Yuvraj Singh is a rich person,
h
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e was suffering blood c
ancer but
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cancer, but
he took medical treatment as he can afford it while thousands of poor cancer patients are dying.
Furthermore
, lack of hospitals in every v
illages
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village
and towns.Owing to
this
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travelling to long d
istance
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distant
increases medical cost which b
ecome
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becomes
h
urdle
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a hurdle
for patients. To cope up, the
government
 should open local medical clinics.
As a result
 of
this
, people can avail treatments at nearest as well it saves their cost. On the flip side, if the
government
 s
pend
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spends
whole money for providing
h
ealth service,
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health services
a health service
 there would be no money in
government
 treasury.
Consequently
, in case of emergency like wars or natural disasters,
government
 cannot do anything. To sum up, masses should help each other, but for poor p
eople
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people, government
government
 ought to provide free
health
 services, it can take help of celebrities to contribute for fundings.

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