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Life teaches us the lessons and such lessons are key to success. How far do you agree with this statement and do you think formal education is important or people should rely on their life experiences.

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Although
such
 topics, in all likelihood, never will yield a consensual agreement, a constructive dialogue on key to success is decided by own lessons
hence
life
 experiences gives a different aspect of knowledge compared to the formal
education
. My view is that irrespective of numerous arguments that exist on either side, I cannot agree that the
life
 experiences are better without a formal
education
. Experiences acquired from own
life
 is not worth without a formal
education
, when it is mandatory for a formal job, but is useful for day-to-day tasks. It is important to note that when formal
education
 is provided, it gives a better insight into different aspects of the daily experiences.
For example
, while I was constructing my own house the knowledge acquired from my formal
education
 helped me to decide certain scientific aspects of the building.
Therefore
, the aforementioned discussion shows that a formal
education
 is highly desirable. Another pivotal aspect of the argument is that a degree enhances the possibility to expect a formal job.
Although
, knowledge gained by ourself can make us ready for a formal job, a professional degree could provide a better understanding of the work that needs to be carried out.
For instance
, the computer programming that I am doing can be done without a formal
education
, but certain theories that I have studied in my professional degree helped me to reduce mental stress. In conclusion,
this
 essay discussed why a formal
education
 is highly desirable and how it helps to reduce the work pressure,
hence
 relying on the teachings from own
life
 is less important. The equally potential evidence to support the arguments I have provided, underlines my opinion.
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