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Band 7.5

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods, which has a negative effect on local food culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The popularity of international
food
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 has rapidly growth. Social media shows various cuisines to individuals and they are influenced by them.
This
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 essay agrees that international meal has negative effects on local folk culture. There are some ideas to prevent drawbacks of the international
meals
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.
Firstly
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, local dishes are more expensive than global
meals
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.
For example
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, Turkey has a lot of traditional
meals
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such
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 as kebap, and doner but they have been replaced by fast foods
such
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 as hamburgers, pizza and hotdogs because restaurants sell their
meals
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 more expensive than fast cuisine and society chooses fast
food
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 for eating. If cafes sell their foods cheaper than fast foodstuff prices, locals can eat traditional cuisine and they can prevent the negative effects of international
meals
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 on the local cooking culture. There, selling
meals
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 at lower prices than fast-
food
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food
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 diner helps local cafe owners.
Secondly
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,
restaurant
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 owners should design their shops more traditional. Most people like cultural things when they are eating their
food
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 in a
restaurant
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.
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, if the owner of the
restaurant
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 provides Eastern cuisine like kebap, he/she can change the cafe's architecture similar to the Eastern culture and people can want to eat
food
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 there because of the ambience. A
restaurant
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's architectural design is one of the most crucial things for influencing the community.
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, making cultural-looking restaurants has good effects on society. In conclusion, there are several reasons how to prevent replacing local foodstuff with international fast foods.
It is clear that
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 the impact of global cuisines has drawbacks to local cooking.
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, if the community support the local shops and restaurants to change their serving style, they can stop the negative influence of international
meals
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.

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Grammar
Ensure consistent use of tenses throughout the essay. Mixed use can confuse readers and detract from the clarity of your arguments.
Development of Ideas
Consider elaborating on examples by providing more detail or statistics to strengthen your arguments and make your points more convincing.
Vocabulary
Pay attention to the accuracy and range of your vocabulary. Where you have used terms like "meals," "foodstuff," or "diner," ensure they correctly convey your intended meaning and consider varying your language to enrich your essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on your essay's structure by introducing clearer transitions between paragraphs to guide the reader more smoothly through your arguments.
Task Response
You've done well to directly address the prompt, making a clear argument regarding your stance on the topic.
Structure
Your introduction and conclusion are effectively structured, providing a clear overview of your essay's direction and summarizing your main points well.
Use of Examples
You've included relevant examples to support your arguments, which is good practice for illustrating your points clearly.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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