Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree?

Artists are not well recognized in some countries, as they should have been. It is debated that the artists having low salaries, should receive government fundings
encourgaing
giving courage or confidence or hope
encouraging
them to continue their work and lead a normal life. I agree with
this
idea but
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idea, but
upto
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up to
some extent only.
This
essay will enlighten the reasons I agree and disagree with the above contention.
Eversince
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Ever since
, the dawn of social media, artists
are gaining
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is gaining
has been gaining
has gained
recognition, not only in their own homeland but
also
across the world. These artists are not only getting paid well, but some of them are charging
exceptional amount
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an exceptional amount
for even a 5
minutes
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minute
task.
For example
, Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan, a renowned Singer from Pakistan charges 18lac Pakistani Rupees, for one hour of his performance.
Also
, the artists are not only charging for their particular
skills but
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skills, but
also
earning for their face value.
For example
, many singers now appear in TV shows as actors or models in the advertisements and charge for that as well. On

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