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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often thought by many
that industrial areas
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industrial areas that
 should be located outside the big cities. In my opinion,
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 is a brilliant thought as the advantages of doing so greatly outweigh any disadvantages.
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 essay discusses how it is an optimal solution to minimize air pollution and traffic congestion in urban areas.
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, there are numerous positive aspects; the
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 and foremost is the provision of less polluted air to the residents of the vast cities. Industrial units, nowadays, are considered as one of the main contributors to air pollution. By taking them out of the cities will eventually help to improve the atmosphere. According to research conducted by the Pakistan Environmental Protection Agency, more than seventy percent of pollutants come from the smoke emitted by the large companies. Another benefit is that it will help control the number of immigrants, migrating to urban areas in search of job opportunities. When people do not find work near their homes, they tend to relocate to urban areas where they find more job options. If companies can operate their local offices from rural areas,
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 residents of small-town will find jobs near to their hometown, and will no longer be forced to migrate to other cities.
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, more than a thousand people were able to earn for their families, and meanwhile, stick to their homeland when Uniliver built a new plant in a small town in the year 2015. In conclusion, companies operating in villages flourish their businesses without threatening the
cities
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city
city's
 environment and
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 provide employment opportunities to the people of local areas. It is predicted that in the near future more and more companies will consider moving their offices outside the cities.
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