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Today more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages?

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It is no doubt that numerous scholars migrate from their home
country
 to another for their educational pursuits.
Although
 there are several benefits
from
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of
 studying in another
country
, the students become negatively influenced and forget their languages from their roots. Admittedly, scholars who study in another
country
 asides there are exposed to better opportunities and greater career paths.
This
 is because they get practical experience firsthand in their field of studies compared to the institutions in their home
country
.
In addition
, they have wider opportunities to interact with other international students thereby learning from them.
For instance
, research shows that majority of students who relocated to other countries to learn academically do better in their careers than those that study in their
country
.
Furthermore
, they are not prone to experiencing delays in their
studies like
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studies, like
 academic strikes, crisis and oppression from lecturers. The learning calendars in these institutions in another place are properly structured without any hiccups thereby aiding the students to finish early.
For example
, several students in Nigeria exceed their maximum length of stay in their schools due to some drawbacks like academic strike and crisis.
Nevertheless
, people who relocate to another nation to study become negatively influenced by their peers. IN the bid to be carried along with the trends, they indulge in dangerous activities which will be in the long run detrimental to them.
For instance
, 80% of international students in Indonesia in 2018 strayed away from their books due to
bad influence
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the bad influence
bad influences
 from their friends. Some of them became drug addicts while others ended up in rehabilitation homes in order to regain their sanity.
Furthermore
, these scholars who move to another geographical location have a major tendency to forget their local languages. They focus more on learning the spoken words of the particular
country
 where they have moved to and pay less attention to the language of their roots.
For example
, a research showed that most Ghanaian students in China who have been living there for several years have forgotten how to speak their
languages
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language
 like Ashanti. In conclusion,
although
 the benefits like greater opportunities and swift studies are attached to students studying in another
country
, the drawbacks are overwhelming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Global citizenship
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Cutting-edge facilities
  • Networking opportunities
  • Career advancement
  • Financial constraints
  • Acclimatization challenges
  • Support network
  • Educational disparity
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Bilingualism
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