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There seems to be an increasing number of crime committed each year. While some people think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both views.

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There has been a recent debate on the best ways to stop crime. While some people opined that offenders should be condemned to death as a
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 of reducing crimes, other people, including me, believe that there are other methods to deal with
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 situation.The rationale for each view will be discussed below. Some persons suggest that criminals should be killed as a
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 of discouraging others from following their footsteps. They think that
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 is the only
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 halt the prevalence of crime.
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, where I live in Lagos,
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 are burnt to death when caught.
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, other individuals, myself included, propose that, rather than killing, there are some other ways to stop crimes in the society. One of
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 methods is the imprisonment of law offenders. People who have committed an offence against the society should be imprisoned to scare other people from copying them. When I was younger,
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, whenever I behave badly at home, my mother would give examples of imprisoned criminals to scare me from continuing that bad behaviour. Another
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 to curb the growth of offensive behaviours in the society is to make criminals carry out community service for free. People often like to be rewarded for their work;
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, people are often unhappy when they work for free.
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 method will make other individuals act carefully to avoid situations that may make them offer unpaid services. In conclusion, while some persons propose death as a deterrent to crimes, I believe that imprisonment of criminals or engaging them in providing free services to humanities are other ways to curb the growth of criminal activities.

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