Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why?

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Most of the high school graduating students
have dilemma
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have a dilemma
whether they should apply for a
university
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or gaining some work experience before
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next level
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the next level
of education will be better. In my opinion, doing a
job
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before
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university
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the university
could prove more
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
in
long term
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the long term
as it can teach us about the real market scenario of skills required and we get to learn to respect
money
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before spending.
Main purpose
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The main purpose
of any student, studying in
an
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a
university
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, is to land a good
job
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.
However
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, they never know which course is going to be best for them as per future
job
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requirements.
Therefore
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, if they can do a
job
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and learn that towards which direction the world is moving forward, they will always be
at
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on
a winning side.
For example
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, over the
last
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decade, how many bachelors degree courses
are focused
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focus
on artificial intelligence. I will say very
few
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little
, even though the artificial intelligence is considered as the hottest commodity in the
job
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portals. Resultantly, students choosing
job
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first
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will have
better idea
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a better idea
of
such
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market trends.
Moreover
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, 9 to 5 jobs can help teenagers to be more
desciplined
obeying the rules
disciplined
discipline
and value the
money
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because youngsters do not value
money
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and time.
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, learning these aspects of life at
early age
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an early age
the early age
will surely boost their grades in higher education.
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, they would not waste their
money
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on random
courses but
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courses, but
wisely choose one as per their work experience. In conclusion,
university
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education has been proving its worth for so
long but
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long, but
if students with
job
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exposure enters the
foray
a noisy fight
fray
, they tend to shine more in their respective careers for all the reasons discussed in
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essay.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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