in recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

nowadays
Suggestion
Nowadays
, people prefer to go to the big malls and
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
shpos
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
shops
shapes
spas
which are caused small businesses closed.
This
is a negative development.
This
essay will
discuse
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discusses
the reason that why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe so. The
first
and main reason comes to
mine
of me or myself
my
mind is that
,
Accept space
,
when the people would rather
to shop
Suggestion
shop
in the big malls, in real they help to
growth
Suggestion
grow
the monopoly
economy
.
this
Suggestion
This
phenomenon is the
bigest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
threat
.
Accept space
.
By monopoly unhealthy
economy
will be powered
.
Accept space
.
people
Suggestion
People
will lose their money and income
generation
Suggestion
generated
will be available to certain people.Researches show in the small
cities
Suggestion
city's
city
shopping from the
bigmalls
Suggestion
big malls
cause
Suggestion
causally
closed and
canceled
not accessible to view
concealed
the small businesses
.
Accept space
.
Consequently
,
bigmalls
Suggestion
big malls
gained monopoly since it becomes the only mall in the town.
Therefore
, destruction of small businesses leads to inefficient
economy
growth. The
last
but not least is that, the small
businesse
Suggestion
business e
ideas
is
Suggestion
are
the result of personal
ceativity
the ability to create
creativity
activity
captivity
which are
estabilished
brought about or set up or accepted; especially long established
established
by local
entrepreneuer
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneurs
entrepreneur
with less
mony
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
, so if they are closed, the main
economy
bcame
enter or assume a certain state or condition
became
become
becomes
weak.
For example
, in Mississaga
,
Accept space
,
mayor
Suggestion
the mayor
decided to close
bigmalls
Suggestion
big malls
on
mondey
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
and
estabilished
brought about or set up or accepted; especially long established
established
a local
daymarket
Suggestion
day market
to encourage the local producer to sell their own products.
This
decision is the best way to keep local
economy
. To sum up,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that people
decision
Suggestion
decide
decided
to
chose
Suggestion
choose
bigmalls
Suggestion
big malls
for
shoppin
searching for or buying goods or services
shopping
lead to stop small economic activities which caused many related problems in society as discuses above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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