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Many people believe that technology creates significant impact of modern life. Do you agree or disagree?

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We are living in the modern world which grows dramatically each day.While, modern technology creates significant impact on our society.It has always been a controversial issue in these days.
On the other hand
, people get lots of benefits for using modern technology.In my opinion, government should take responsibility for ensuring
healthy life
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a healthy life
.In the following paragraphs, I shall put forth my arguments to support my views.
Firstly
, the advent of modern life changes makes remarkable development in the modern Era.Folks burden with serious diseases.They obtain these kind of diseases from polluted atmosphere.
For example
, some people smoke cigarette in open area.
Consequently
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it influences health of passive smokers, who blame their health because of others bad habits.
Secondly
, fast food makes denotable changes in our culture. Especially, teenagers emulate attractive advertisements words.
However
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,
parents work in offices.They haven
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negation of a word or group of words
Not
 been time for cooking.Thereby
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they order dishes from online sites.
Additionally
, junky food enriches with carbohydrate contents.It deposits cholesterol inside of
body
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the body
.In the modern world, most of the individuals couldn't get time for exercise.
students
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Students
goes
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go
 to school with institutes bus.
Besides
, worker utilizes lift technology.
As a result
, they do not get time for burning fat.
Consequently
, it affects body strength. Folks and pupils have become obese generations.
secondly
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Secondly
, government must take responsibility for ensuring healthier society.
they
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They
 should restrict cigarettes and
drugs
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drug
 usage in limelight area. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that government should take responsibility for teaching healthy diet to society
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and they must void cigarettes and fast food culture usage in limelight areas.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • accessibility
  • improved
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • opportunities
  • contributed
  • sustainability
  • enhanced
  • transformed
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