Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Dear Mr. Paul I am writing to inform you about my willingness to renew my rental contract for a longer period of time.
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would be beneficial for both of us. I would like to rent your place for another 6 months
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I am ready for the amount of money that
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would take
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I just need your agreement for
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change of plans is that I have a newborn child now, and I have to take care of him and make sure he is in the right place to do so.
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apartment is cosy and perfect for children. One problem I have in my apartment is the noise from my next neighbour. I wish that they could reduce the volume of their music,especially at night , so my baby and I can get enough sleep and be refreshed in the morning. Thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Lamar

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Make sure to clearly explain why you want to stay longer. Add more detail.
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Try to separate different ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one key point.
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Be more polite in stating your request. Adding 'please' can help.
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The letter is clear and polite, which is great for communication.
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You provided a valid reason for wanting to stay longer, which is good.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lease extension
  • rent renewal
  • tenancy agreement
  • extend contract
  • residential term
  • currently residing
  • plan adjustment
  • maintenance issue
  • residential upkeep
  • repair request
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