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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet Other however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 it is sometimes considered that the well-being of each
person
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 should be their concern, others think the administrations should be in charge of the nationals' dietary regimen. In my own view, I consider the fitness of a
person
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 is their personal obligation. On the one hand, it is thought that since every individual who neglects their health will bear the effects of infirmity,
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 they should make their healthiness an utmost duty and I agree.
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, if people fail to concentrate on taking proper meals and being healthy,
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 they will have to face the consequences of ill-health themselves.
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, a
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 who suffers from food poisoning, will feel the discomfort and
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 have to make financial sacrifices by settling hospital bills.
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, when people take charge of their own well-being, they are more likely to be healthier and can become more productive.
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, the well-being of people could be an indication of good governance and ensure better stability in the society.
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, other people believe the leaders of a country should be saddled with the task of ensuring all residents obtain perfect diets. Whereas every single
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 bears the discomfort of sickness, the government becomes negatively affected in the case of an epidemic.
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, the outbreak of Ebola in some parts of Africa led to citizens fleeing their countries in fear of contracting the disease, thereby reducing manpower in
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 countries. In conclusion, despite conflicting views on whose duty it is to ensure good health and balanced meals of people, I believe every entity should be responsible for their own fitness to avoid the negative constraints of unhealthiness.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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