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Some people think that students should be given homework every day. Others think that this can be a burden for them. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Some
people
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 believe that
students
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 should do
homework
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 during the day,
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 others say that
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 issue makes them tired and they don't need a torrent of
homework
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 after they have finished school. In my opinion, I think doing
homework
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 daily is useful for
students
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 if it is not too difficult.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that
homework
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 is really essential for
Students
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 and I agree with
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 view
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 the fact that, these
students
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 are able to remember what was taught in class easily.
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, these
students
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 can strengthen their memory during their lives better than others.
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, these
students
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 are more responsible and learn how to plan their time before the deadline.
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, some
people
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 think that
homework
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 daily is a bad decision for
students
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. One reason is that they after finishing school need some hubbies and entertainment with their classmates or friends and
this
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 way may make them healthier in the long term. Another reason is that it can affect their family time.
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, if
students
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 had not a chance to play with their friends almost every evening, they would be tired and it is not good for their feelings and mental activities. In conclusion,
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 both views have some advantages and disadvantages, I personally tend to agree with
people
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 who think doing
homework
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 is an appropriate decision for
students
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, if their teachers give it in a smart way so that
students
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 do not feel too tired and stressed.

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Task Response
Clarify the arguments for both views more distinctly, and ensure that each argument is supported with relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between points and improve the overall flow of ideas. This will enhance coherence and make your argument easier to follow.
Task Response
You present a clear opinion and support it with reasons, which is important for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is essential for coherence.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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