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The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's busy lifestyle, it is imperative to remain healthy and exercise is the most effective method to achieve it. In my opinion, while there are many ways to keep oneself healthy, exercising regularly is the right choice.
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 of the advantages of exercising regularly is that it keeps
one
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's body fit and flexible. It helps you burn the calories that
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 may have accumulated during the day by having junk or oily food. Following a routine of exercises helps you understand your
bodey
the entire structure of an organism (an animal, plant, or human being)
body
 requirement and
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 starts taking care of their body in a better
wat
how something is done or how it happens
way
. Once you start exercising, you tend to give a keen attention not only to what you are eating but
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 about how much you are eating.
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 at the same time you
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 tend to notice the amount of calories you are consuming.
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, exercising regularly keeps you motivated and positive about yourself as well the surrounding environment by
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giving
 you a new perspective in life. It
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 makes you a role model for someone who has been struggling to start exercising or for that matter to remain healthy.
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, there are other ways of improving health as
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well, such
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 as dieting in which
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 tends to reduce their food intake
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which in the beginning is quite difficult but gradually
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 gets used to it and eventually lose their appetite.
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This, however
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, in my opinion, isn't the best way of
improvinig
getting higher or more vigorous
improving
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's health as
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 has to always restrict
themself
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 from eating whatever and whenever they feel like having and are mostly concerned with the amount of calories they are consuming in their daily food habit.
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Moreover, this
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 method
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one
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's metabolism to
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 an effect that
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eventally
after an unspecified period of time or an especially long delay
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 starts gaining weight even if
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 eats slightly beyond their routine consumption.
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However, following
 a regular regime of exercise is beneficial as it has no negative effect on their body. In case
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 is not able to continue with their routine exercise, they do not tend to gain weight. All that happens is they tend to go back to their lethargic state where they are not so physically active.
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 to conclude, I completely agree that regular
exercis
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 does
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improve
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's health and
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in fact
 is the best way possible while other methods are good but not so effective.

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