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Fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available

It is a well-known fact that nutrition habits play a significant role in
people
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's lives, especially fast foodfood.
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, whether the consumption of fast
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 is much more beneficial or not has become a rather hotly debated issue among
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 from every walk of life. I genuinely believe that there are some positive impacts on a number of
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.
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 with, a great number of society suffer from insufficient time.
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 is because of the fact that
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people
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 have to work in order to meet their basic needs for long hours. It seems that these
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 are unlikely to cook cuisine.
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, today fast
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 branches are quite widespread and
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 can find them almost everywhere.
People
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 can eat
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 without searching for a restaurant for a long time and when they find it, they don’t have to wait for long.
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, when I was working long shifts, I generally preferred to have MC Donalds, Burger King or KFC which are the best fast
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 branches. Another positive effect of fast
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 is that
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 kind of
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 is becoming cheaper day by day.
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 because the cost of the ingredients of fast
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 is low, the prices are
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 pretty/fairly reasonable prices.
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,
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 have more of a tendency to eat fast
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. There is no doubt that a quite/considerable of
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 who eat fast
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 frequently/ too often are far more likely to protect their budget with ease in comparison to those who rarely eat fast
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.
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, my sister tries to save money so she prefers to eat fast foodstuff
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 of eating expensive meals, as opposed to me.
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, there is a wide variety of reasons why fast foodstuff has favourable impacts on
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 especially in terms of saving time and money becoming cheaper and more widely available. When all these above-mentioned factors are taken into consideration, it looks as though, if we want quick service and put some money aside, fast cooking consumption is a logical solution.

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general
Make sure to proofread your essay to catch and correct typos, such as 'fast foodfood.' Also, try to avoid phrases like 'this kind of food' without specifying it as 'fast food'. Instead of 'pretty/fairly reasonable prices', choose one term for clarity.
content
Ensure your paragraphs each have a clear main idea and that each point you make clearly supports your argument. Consider elaborating on how the accessibility of fast food positively affects society beyond just time-saving and budget-friendly advantages.
style
Consider varying your sentence structure to maintain reader engagement and make your writing flow better. This can enhance the overall readability and coherence of your essay.
content
You have identified relevant advantages of fast food consumption, illustrating a good understanding of the topic.
support
Your essay provides personal insights and examples, which help to illustrate your points effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • lifestyles
  • long working hours
  • prepare meals
  • Regular consumption
  • health issues
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • high levels
  • sugars
  • fats
  • salts
  • economic factors
  • cheaper
  • healthier meal options
  • low-income families
  • students
  • cultural influence
  • global expansion
  • adapting menus
  • local tastes
  • integrating
  • environmental concerns
  • packaging waste
  • carbon footprints
  • meat production
  • traditional cuisine
  • decline
  • culinary heritage
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