Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

The
time
during which a person is neither work nor performs his duties is called
leisure
time
. It is true that the wise use of
leisure
time
always helped people to achieve their future goals.
Therefore
, I strongly agreed that
leisure
time
must not be
waste
Suggestion
a waste
in watching
sport
Suggestion
sports
. (49) We had seen in the past that people mostly do some kind of physical activities in their
leisure
time
. Even the old age people used their free
time
to make them healthy and fit.
Thus
, our
ancestors
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ancestors, although
although
enjoy their
leisure
time but
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time, but
never spoil it in watching
sport
Suggestion
sports
. (49) Presently, the trend of watching
sport
during
leisure
time
is becoming more and more common.
This
is because of several reasons.
For example
, those who are working in industries for long hours really do not like to go outside during their free
time
because they are too much tired.
Similarly
, many people who are addicted from gatherings
also
want to spend their free
time
at homes while watching
sport
Suggestion
sports
.
However
,
this
phenomenon is not only wasting the precious
time
of
people but
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people, but
also
moving them towards a state of restlessness with several health issues like eyes infection and headache. (99) The recent development in science and technology has enabled the people to perform various healthy activities like walk on
fitness machine
Suggestion
the fitness machine
during their free
time
.
Thus
, if the people keep on adapting better options during
leisure
time
,
then
our new generation will surely be more progressive. (46)
Hence
, I strongly believed that
leisure
time
must be utilized in healthy physical activities
instead
of wasting it in watching
sport
Suggestion
sports
. (21)

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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