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Some people feel that boarding school (where students or pupils live at the school during the long term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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It is often said that boarding schools are the great alternative for children to determine their
success education
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success in education
. Meanwhile, other arguments are against the idea.
This
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who study in
bording
the act of passengers and crew getting aboard a ship or aircraft
boarding
school
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 with longer supervision will have
enhance
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enhanced
 discipline.
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, children could focus on their many subjects, and do routine activities from in the morning to the night regularly.
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, pupils do exercise every morning an hour as well as no
electronics
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electronic
 access during the learning process could not
distrub
move deeply
disturb
 them.
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, sometimes children get bored with methods and rules in the
school
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. In fact, not a bit pupils feel stressed because of the obligation without accompaniment expression freedom.
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, the parents lose control towards their child because his child
spend
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spends
most time
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more time
 in
academy
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the academy
.
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,
parent
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the parent
a parent
 does not know what is happening with his child in daily life.
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, the parents will have no way to find whether their
children
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child's
children's
 condition are being bullied at
school
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 or getting an unhealthy.
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 distance can create a bed relation between parents and children. To conclude, it seems advisable that boarding
school
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 is the excellent option for those claiming to build
discipline mental
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mental discipline
.
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, it is not a great choice to parents in monitor their children in daily basis.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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