Question: with an increasing number of people eating fast food which if eaten too regularly can cause health issues,some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It has been discovered that frequent consumption of ready made meal is liable to lead to medical pathologies for the consumers.With
continuous rise
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the continuous rise
in the population who eats fast
food
,
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,
it is opined that the only
way
out is ending
this
business
.
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.
However I
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However, I
completely disagree with
this
opinion as it will only increase the rate of unemployment.
Therefore
,
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,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
way
out
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out, such
such
as healthy
food
production awareness program can be put in place for
food
providers. Generally
,
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,
the job available is not sufficient to meet the demand of graduate at all educational levels.
Hence
,
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,
the number of unemployed increase day-by-day.Graduates
have
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then devised
then devise
then
devised different means for themselves as a
way
of preventing
idleness and
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idleness, and
to make ends meet. One of them is looking into their skills and setting up a restaurant as
food
is one of the physiological needs of man. The idea of stoping
this
survival means will take
food
away from the table of those who depend on it, add to the number of job seekers thereby create more problem for the government and society. In my opinion
,
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,
health awareness training program for
food
providers on healthy
food
production can help tackle the challenge of disease.
This
can begin with identifying errors in
food
preparation and addressing them. In
this
way
, their job is safe and the health of the nation is preserved. In conclusion, putting an end to restaurant meal as a
way
of saving people's health will cause unemployment rather training on safe meal production should be given to
food
providers.
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