Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a common knowledge that entertainers

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as film stars, singers, athletes, and movie directors are one of the highest paid people in the world. Some think that

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is unfair as these jobs do not account for the six figure number

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usually paid for them.

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, I disagree with

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point of view and will explain the reasons in the essay below. Famous people are talented individuals who have dedicated their whole lives to hone their talent. Most of these A-stars will divulge that the secret to their success is a rigid training schedule that made them miss countless birthday parties, weekend outings, and summer vacations. Serena Williams, the famous American tennis player, once mentioned that she used to train for four hours, seven days a week ever since she was five years old.

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the level of

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the trait of sincere and steadfast fixity of purpose

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these people invest in their careers, and I think

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dedication and sacrifice of a normal childhood is priceless.

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, some critics would argue that there are far more noble jobs that are grossly underpaid

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as teaching and counselling.

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, these

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have a crucial purpose of shaping the minds of future generations.

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these claims are understandable,

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does not undermine the fact that fame comes with a tremendous sacrifice of

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, most of these entertainers have their lives splashed in

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the tabloids

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paparazzi

and zealous fans. In conclusion, being famous comes at a great price of both physical training and personal freedom;

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, it is only fair for individuals involved to be highly paid.

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does not diminish the unfairness of the fact that there are jobs

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as the ones involved in education that are hugely underpaid.

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