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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this element?

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Many people believe government´s money should be used to maintain and fix railways
instead
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 of roads. In my opinion,
this
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 is a very wise decision and in
this
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 essay it will be explained why. Railway´s maintenance is essential as trains are used by thousands of workers to commute to
work
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, every day. Lower price and comfortable journeys, are the two main reasons that explain why citizens prefer trains rather than cars to get to
work
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.
In addition
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, travelling by train is considerably less stressful than driving
with
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in
 heavy traffic from neighbouring towns to big cities. Take,
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, in Buenos Aires it would take maybe 1 hour driving to get to
work
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 from nearby surrounding areas
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 as Vicente Lopez, whereas by train you would only need 15 to 20 minutes. Even though spending money on roads is important to improve car´s durability, is not as meaningful to people´s life as improving the quality of train journeys.
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, fixed roads would
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raise the level or amount of something
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 the amount of cars in them and
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 increase the possibilities of being part of traffic jams and accidents and
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 of arriving late for
work
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. In conclusion, whereas roads should be looked after by the government to prevent car breaking, more money should be spent on railways.
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, arriving on time and in shape to
work
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 is essential for people's lives and
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 depends on the good functioning of public transport
such
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 as trains.
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