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Some Organizations believed that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The terms and conditions set by any company for its workers are known as job requirements. In my opinion, physical appearance of officials in any
organization
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 is as important as their working skills during office hours. (36) We had seen in the past that there were no specific job requirements for people working in any
organization
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 excluding uniform positions. All the employees were judged by their
work
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 rather than their outlook in the past. (37) Presently, it is compulsory for a person working in a bank, hospital, shopping centre or in any
organization
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 to look nice and smart as he has to interact with different people during his
work
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 time. Whereas,
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 condition seems irrelevant for those who worked online on computers while sitting at home or those employed in the production units of different organizations. In
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 situations, the quality of
work
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 has always given preference. (72) The recent development in job industry has bound the employees to follow certain dress codes in many departments. Nowadays, while hiring staff, the employers
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 consider
applicants
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applicant's
 personality
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 to their academic qualifications and experiences.
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, if the employers keep on improving their attitude towards professionalism,
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 it will become necessary for applicants to have high working skills as well as smart look in order to meet the requirements of certain jobs. (73)
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, in my opinion, both quality of
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 and physical appearance are important in the professional atmosphere. The quality of
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 boosts the reputation of any
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 while the physical appearance builds our good impression among those who worked with us. (41)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional image
  • self-confidence
  • team cohesion
  • customer-facing roles
  • cornerstone
  • customer satisfaction
  • innovation
  • continuous improvement
  • engaged and motivated
  • workplace culture
  • rapidly changing work environment
  • technological advancements
  • remote work trends
  • functional attire
  • productivity
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