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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The process of improving socioeconomic and living standards of people is measured in terms of
progress
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 of a
country
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. In my opinion, there are many factors which contributed to the overall
development
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 of any
country
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 including economic
progress
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. (38) We had seen in the past that economic
development
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 always remained a major concern for governments in many countries. In fact, the
progress
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 of a
country
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 was actually measured in terms of its economic growth. (35) Presently, it is doubtless to say that uplifting economy is an important task for every government. Nowadays, it is compulsory for any
country
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 to improve its economic standards in order to compete with the international community in the field of science, technology and business.
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, in all the industrial regions of the world, the economy is considered the backbone of every government as the whole
progress
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 of a
country
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 is reflected by its better economic conditions.
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, the
development
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 in health, education, employment opportunities and social conditions is treated exactly the same way economic
progress
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 in all the developed countries. (103) The huge advancement in science and technology has forced the governments to focus on all the sectors individually that are essential for the overall
progress
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 of any
country
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.
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, if the governments keep on improving all the sectors,
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 every
country
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 will become a progressed
country
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 in the near future. (50)
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, in my opinion, the
progress
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 of a
country
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 is not the improvements made in a particular field like economy, rather it is a team work of all the fields that joins hands in the overall
development
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 of a
country
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. (40)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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