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Some people say that international sporting events contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #events #peace #stability #world
Sport is the best way to spread love and peace
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 Take an example of
football world cup organization
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a football world cup organization
,
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,
 the
last
 event was held in
russia
a former communist country in eastern Europe and northern Asia; established in 1922; included Russia and 14 other soviet socialist republics (Ukraine and Byelorussia and others); officially dissolved 31 December 1991
Russia
 and you can see more than 50 nationality is celebrating and encouraging
thier
of them or themselves
their
 teams without any reported incident that there was any issues or troubles
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 Massive
cermonies
a formal event performed on a special occasion
ceremonies
sermons
ceremonials
such
 as
olympic
of or relating to the Olympic Games
Olympic
 games or
worldcup
 or any sort of the big events
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,
alawys
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
 consider cultural
divesity
noticeable heterogeneity
diversity
 and positive environment by spreading ads all over the surrounding areas or even in the game field
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 Good athletes are
alawys
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
 giving a positive
vibes
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vibe
 and view to
thier
of them or themselves
their
 own home country
,
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,
 which makes people to know more about
diffirent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 countries and arrange a visit to there to know more about its culture
,
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,
habbits
an established custom
habits
 and way of living
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Furthermore there
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Furthermore, there
 is a kind of stereotype for some countries that can be
easlriy
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
 changed
in
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into
 that kind of
cermonies
a formal event performed on a special occasion
ceremonies
.
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 For sure world stability is much more challenging subject
further
 than sports and games
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,
 but without any doubt those kind of events have a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 effect on the people and communities
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