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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

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I am writing to express my disappointment in the accommodation arranged for me. I am
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 new international student that enrolled
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 3 months medical lab course. The main problem I have with the accommodation is the fact that it is a shared room with three other adult students.
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, the room is extremely small in size. The initial arrangement agreed upon was to get an ensuite 2-bedroom apartment to share with just one student. Unfortunately, I got
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 apartment is not conducive for me because it is overcrowded and quite stuffy.
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, I do have my asthma attack reoccurring. I would be grateful if you could find a more conducive apartment as agreed.
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 with another agent. I hope the situation will be resolved as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Adesina Morenike
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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