Obesity is an increaseing public health problem in some part of the world explain some possible reason for this problem, and suggest some solution.

Obesity is a big problem now days in many countries, and it is
cause
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the cause
of many serious health problems. It is a starting point of any disease. Not only
physically but
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physically, but
emotionally and mentally too. There are many reasons for fatness. Our unhealthy lifestyle is
main reason
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the main reason
for obesity. We take a lot of calories
then
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than
our requirements and do nothing to burn our calories. People are not doing any physical exercise
.
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.
Mainly, now days we
have only setting
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have only been setting
are only setting
have only set
were only setting
have only been set
were only set
jobs. Even in office time they do not want to go to
outside
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the outside
for
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of
their lunch and they
takes
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take
unhealthy food. Children, love to eat chocolate, sweets and junk food. Due to
this
,
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,
children are becoming
fatty
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fatter
. Fat is
main reason
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the main reason
for blood pressure, blood sugar, pain in joints and many other health issues. Because of
this
people are not fit for physical work. They feel tired very soon. We have to do something about
this
problem. It is not good for our society. To reduce fat we need to accept healthy diet and lifestyle, go for
morning walk
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a morning walk
morning walks
and take exercises daily and do yoga. Try to walk daily if your
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
is not so far. People should avoid high fat food. They can drink juice not unhealthy drink. People need to change their lifestyle. There are some other ways we can deal with
this
issue. Like, awareness about fat, through television and play
also
. You can
also
increase
tham
objective case of they
them
thumb
team
to play
out door
located, suited for, or taking place in the open air
outdoor
games.
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