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The diagram outlines the information about what proportion of males and females of different
age
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 group
were involved doing
Suggestion
were involved in doing
 the physical activity in regular
basics
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 in the year 2010; the figures are measured in percentage
(
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(
%). Overall, females of all the
age
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 ratios were significantly higher in doing regular exercises in a daily
basics
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 as compared to the males. A result worth pointing out is that males of
younger
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the younger age group
age
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 group who performed
this
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 activity ascended sharply to more than a half as opposed to the middle aged men which gradually declined to four times less than
total
Suggestion
the total
. But,
this
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 wasn’t always the case for men over 45 years as it began to increase steadily to 42.3% and
then
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 to 46% when they were more than 65 years of
age
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. Turning to the females of younger ages, it was witnessed that level of performing daily cardiovascular exercise gradually peaked
to
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in
at
 47.7% and
then
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 fluctuated between 35-64 years of
age
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 at around 50% and as for the old aged people, it was slightly less than that
of previous
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of a previous age
age
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 groups which accounted for 47.7%.
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