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These days people in some countries living in a "throw-away" society which means people use things in a short time then throw them away .what do you think are the causes and what problems are caused by this trend ?

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Nowadays people of certain nations dwelling in a throw_away culture
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 in other word they waste the items they bought
after
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over
 a tiny period of time
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firstly
 explain the reasons behind
this
 norm before presenting
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its
 impacts on the society
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 There are many reasons
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 why people do so
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Firstly
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 sense of irresponsibility
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People
 buy something and don't bother to find a suitable place to dispose it
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instead
 they are throwing it to their surroundings. To cite an example
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 I saw a guy which thrown away an empty bottle of mineral water on the road
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 when I asked why you are not wasting it into a dustbin
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He
 replied me are you the one who is responsible to keep the
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an open way (generally public) for travel or transportation
road
 clean
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Secondly
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 lack of proper waste management in mega cities
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 as
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the population
 expands every day
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 people rashes into big
cities but
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cities, but
government
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the government
deosnt
does not
doesn't
 care to think about the
wastes
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waste
 management of
this
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crowd
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 Turning to the effects, it's unfortunately very sad to say that
this
 trend has and will have very dangerous outcomes
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in
 the people's life
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First
 and foremost
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 due to
this
carless
marked by lack of attention or consideration or forethought or thoroughness; not careful
careless
 act of people
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 the society will get
chocked
throw carelessly
chucked
checked
 into dusts where different kinds of microorganisms
such
 as bacterias
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 viruses and parasites can easily grow and spread
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 which eventually results in a diseased and unhealthy community.
For instance
 a vast number children affected by
diarrhea
frequent and watery bowel movements; can be a symptom of infection or food poisoning or colitis or a gastrointestinal tumor
diarrhoea
 due to poor sanitation
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Furthermore, as
 the result of poor management of wastes people will not enjoy living in cities as it will give a dirty image of urban life to the public
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 To conclude
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 due to
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a sense
the sense
 of irresponsibility by people and poor coordination of wastes by
government
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the government
 resulted in an unhealthy lifestyle and an ugly city picture.

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