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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays, Population is increasing at an alarming rate and, most of big cities are overcrowded.
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 issue has been facing globally for a few years and, there are several factors linked to it. I think certain positive steps are required to fix general issues of overpopulation. Most of the big cities are centred for education and industries.
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 the country has benefited in terms of the economy, but people living there in polluted environments.
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, Traffic is a famous problem as there are a lot of vehicles on the road and that too because of most of the masses located in one particular region. Mostly in urban areas, big shopping centres are situated for the general public to fulfil basic needs and, these markets can be seen full of crowd in working hours.
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 it serves the requirements of nearby folks, but roads lead to those centres get stuck in rush hours.
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, Universities and colleges are
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 located near to these places and usually students get late for class because of no rooms in these ways. If education centres and medical hospitals open in villages and small towns, a certain amount of crowd could be reduced in major cities.
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 countryside areas have less opportunities for jobs, certain plants could be opened for facilitating those who change their location for finding a better life in the big towns. To conclude, There would be essential steps required to resolve the overpopulation problem in most urban areas and, both general people and government should be supported equally. I think the Government should provide some better policies in front of public by providing benefits in terms of markets, houses, jobs and education. It is considered effective, if wise decision would be taken by the general public as well.
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