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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #students
Certain people are born with the certain talent. The universities
give
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are given
 equal numbers of both in subjects. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly disagree on the point of view.
Firstly
, every
students
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students'
student's
student
interest
 in different subject male students are more interested in vocational courses and female
interest
 in home science courses. Some country university girls do not give admission in practical subjects. If
give
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given
this
 subject there are not
more concentration
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more concentrated
 to practical.
However
, the collage
give
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gives
equal number
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an equal number
 of seats in
course
 fashion design if boys
are does not take
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are not taking
aren't taking
are not taken
aren't taken
 admission in
this
course
 because
their
in or at that place
there
 are not
interest
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interested
 in these
coursea
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courses a
course a
. So the half of
seats
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the seats
 in boys are
baste
the supreme effort one can make
best
.
On the other hand
, due to
this
students
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student
 may prefer to other university in
anotjer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
another
 cities. It
is approach
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is approaching
is approached
 the other countries because
university
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the university
do not give
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does not give
 the
interest
cources
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
causes
.
Moreover
, other
courses
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courses, student
student
do not constrate
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does not contract
do not contract
do not concentrate
 and we will lose
hia
the person or persons that; the one that
who
 motivate and think negative and dump study in
middle
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the middle
 of the
course
. There does not improve
such
kind of
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kind, of
course
 own
devalped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
. To conclude, universities should not accept equal number of male and female
student
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students
 because certain
student
 more
interest
 in own field.
For example
, boys are more
interest
 subject is
mechanical enginear
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a mechanical engineer
mechanical engineer
mechanical engineers
. Universities
also
 gave a
student
interest
 own
subjects
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subject
. If they developed
in
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into
 more and more.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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