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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Certain people are born with the certain talent. The universities
give
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are given
 equal numbers of both in subjects. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly disagree on the point of view.
Body · 1
Firstly
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, every
students
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students'
student's
student
interest
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 in different subject male students are more interested in vocational courses and female
interest
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 in home science courses. Some country university girls do not give admission in practical subjects. If
give
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given
this
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 subject there are not
more concentration
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more concentrated
 to practical.
However
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, the collage
give
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gives
equal number
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an equal number
 of seats in
course
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 fashion design if boys
are does not take
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are not taking
aren't taking
are not taken
aren't taken
 admission in
this
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course
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 because
their
in or at that place
there
 are not
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interest
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interested
 in these
coursea
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courses a
course a
. So the half of
seats
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the seats
 in boys are
baste
the supreme effort one can make
best
.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, due to
this
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students
Suggestion
student
 may prefer to other university in
anotjer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
another
 cities. It
is approach
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is approaching
is approached
 the other countries because
university
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the university
do not give
Suggestion
does not give
 the
interest
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cources
education imparted in a series of lessons or meetings
courses
causes
.
Moreover
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, other
courses
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courses, student
student
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do not constrate
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does not contract
do not contract
do not concentrate
 and we will lose
hia
the person or persons that; the one that
who
 motivate and think negative and dump study in
middle
Suggestion
the middle
 of the
course
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. There does not improve
such
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kind of
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kind, of
course
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 own
devalped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
.
Conclusion
To conclude, universities should not accept equal number of male and female
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student
Suggestion
students
 because certain
student
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 more
interest
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 in own field.
For example
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, boys are more
interest
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 subject is
mechanical enginear
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a mechanical engineer
mechanical engineer
mechanical engineers
. Universities
also
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 gave a
student
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interest
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 own
subjects
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subject
. If they developed
in
Suggestion
into
 more and more.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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